tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2357537323452520348.post3097685189884657051..comments2021-08-06T09:01:59.596-07:00Comments on princess scribe: Forgive me, Father...princess scribehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/05951535722429696213noreply@blogger.comBlogger13125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2357537323452520348.post-6591892282586122392009-10-02T09:25:06.680-07:002009-10-02T09:25:06.680-07:00Dear Sir Tennyson ~
Being a former thespian mysel...Dear Sir Tennyson ~<br /><br />Being a former thespian myself, I can't agree more.<br /><br />After I get to a particular stage in drafts, I hold a table read. Not in the sense of one for producers, but I assemble actors and a few invited guests to read the story aloud - without advance preparation. <br /><br />Actors will work hard to make a line work - my theory is that if I do not give them the script in advance those glaring moments will be obvious.<br /><br />They also help with character notes, backstory, etc. It's a lovely experience!<br /><br />Alexis and kole - thank you kindly for sharing your thoughts!<br /><br />~ HRHprincess scribehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05951535722429696213noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2357537323452520348.post-82274321473892760082009-10-02T09:12:04.303-07:002009-10-02T09:12:04.303-07:00Great post!
For me, it's a question of leanin...Great post!<br /><br />For me, it's a question of leaning on actors. When writing a character, I start thinking about a specific actor, or a specific type of actor, and my challenge in rewrites is not to use that performance as a crutch. It's a problem with every one of my screenplays where archetype isn't quite so loud.<br /><br />Of course, loving actors as I do, those tend to be the screenplays I enjoy the most. Posting on Triggerstreet has been a big help in this regard, actually. Now that I've gotten a feel for the site, I'm planning to post a draft on one of my more precious scripts - something I'm producing and directing myself. Feedback there seems to be more efficient than waiting on people in my own professional network, even if it's not always as as deliberately constructive.<br /><br />I think this is the draft of that particular film where I've dropped the crutches. We shall see!Tennyson E. Steadhttp://www.8sidedforum.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2357537323452520348.post-13864731857615255952009-09-28T10:37:41.553-07:002009-09-28T10:37:41.553-07:00Random comment for "show, don't tell"...Random comment for "show, don't tell"<br /><br />I write scenes where a charector can't talk. Maybe they're hiding from someone...<br /><br />Also, try rewriting your scenes with NO VO's. They are the enemy. They destroy show don't tell.<br /><br />On to my weekness, I can't write action. I suck at it. I've been writing comedy radio professionaly for years so diologue is my bread and butter. But when it comes to a great action sequence it always seems horrid and fake. <br /><br />So I force myself to write short films that are entirely action.<br />I'll never do anything with them but it helps.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2357537323452520348.post-24680961011764607612009-09-28T10:10:24.754-07:002009-09-28T10:10:24.754-07:00Plot-driven set pieces. They frustrate the hell ou...Plot-driven set pieces. They frustrate the hell out of me--until I manage to find a character hook into them. They take me forever and feel like a grind.Alexis Nikihttp://www.thethirddraft.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2357537323452520348.post-77219738033863923782009-09-28T09:49:04.736-07:002009-09-28T09:49:04.736-07:00Kind Sir John ~
How did this end up? I'm all ...Kind Sir John ~<br /><br />How did this end up? I'm all atwitter!princess scribehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05951535722429696213noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2357537323452520348.post-58271314580526998662009-09-28T09:47:09.008-07:002009-09-28T09:47:09.008-07:00Somehow this all reminded me of when I was working...Somehow this all reminded me of when I was working on <i>The Evil That Men Do</i>, one of those rare times that the writer was kept on location (Guadalajara) for the entire shoot. I handed the star, Charles Bronson, a page of rewrites one day and he questioned some dialogue that I felt was brimming with brilliant subtext. "So how's the audience going to know?" Charlie asked me. "We gonna hand 'em a flyer when they come into the theatre?"John M Crowtherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02332079630084282572noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2357537323452520348.post-16298443002344458532009-09-28T07:43:11.376-07:002009-09-28T07:43:11.376-07:00Milady Sandra ~
Here's a fun exercise!
Write...Milady Sandra ~<br /><br />Here's a fun exercise!<br /><br />Write a series of "scenes" (in whatever form you are writing in, stageplay, novel, screenplay). Let these be short scenes - they can even be French scenes.<br /><br />Write them SHOWING action only. Dialog free - and raise some pretty huge emotional stakes. A woman decides to leave her spouse ... how do you SHOW this? (hint - she could clearly and deliberately pack a bag as he snores, take off her ring, place it on a table and leave). A young man decides to come out at Thanksgiving dinner ... make them huge, and have fun with them!<br /><br />Does this make sense? Is this of help?<br /><br />~ HRHprincess scribehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05951535722429696213noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2357537323452520348.post-69975094241199053642009-09-27T16:00:14.678-07:002009-09-27T16:00:14.678-07:00Telling, not showing is my bugaboo. I love to hear...Telling, not showing is my bugaboo. I love to hear myself talk (on the page) and then my writing group complains that I'm telling them, not showing them. argh. Once I've been made aware, I return to the offending scene and set in the sensory detail and let the dialogue flow. But I keep forgetting! Help me, Princess.Sandra de Helenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12511871017361931054noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2357537323452520348.post-8231330398596402952009-09-27T15:54:23.321-07:002009-09-27T15:54:23.321-07:00Telling instead of showing. argh. Sometimes I just...Telling instead of showing. argh. Sometimes I just like to hear myself talk (on the page) and then my feedback emerges as "show, don't tell!" I know, I know. So, what I do is set the scene with all the sensory detail, write the dialogue, and get the heck out of the way. But I keep forgetting! help me, Princess.Sandranoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2357537323452520348.post-25928172347288037482009-09-27T14:15:35.814-07:002009-09-27T14:15:35.814-07:00My advice - leave behind self criticism. I went th...My advice - leave behind self criticism. I went through that as an actress, and became immobilized after 24 + years in the craft.<br /><br />Forgive yourself. There are no mistakes. Flex the muscles. Move on. You can do it!!!!princess scribehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05951535722429696213noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2357537323452520348.post-8246823248428448942009-09-27T13:57:52.593-07:002009-09-27T13:57:52.593-07:00Good piece, HRH!
Here's my weakness: in contr...Good piece, HRH!<br /><br />Here's my weakness: in contrast to my earlier years, when words flowed freely, I am now unable to get started. It's otherwise called a writer's block.<br /><br />I guess part of the block is that I am too self-critical. If it is not something better than I ever did before, I don't want to do it.<br /><br />I exhaust myself before I even begin. A million reasons not to write.JVBhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02646843569394755668noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2357537323452520348.post-24401883833202726802009-09-27T10:18:16.419-07:002009-09-27T10:18:16.419-07:00Dearest Lady Michelle ~
How do you build up your ...Dearest Lady Michelle ~<br /><br />How do you build up your muscles in this area? Do you have any routine, or set way?<br /><br />~ HRHprincess scribehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05951535722429696213noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2357537323452520348.post-12792545838682445692009-09-27T09:56:33.189-07:002009-09-27T09:56:33.189-07:00My weakness...third act. Third fucking act. I al...My weakness...third act. Third fucking act. I always like to end at the all-is-lost. I like everyone to die and be miserable.MichelleShymannoreply@blogger.com